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The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagrams below show how houses can be protected in areas which are prone to flooding. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The graphs elucidate solutions for houses in flooding-affected areas under different situations.
Overall
, different methods are applied based on whether a
stopbank
 is located on the riverside or not. No matter what, houses in flooding areas are expected to raise their floor
level
 above the ground to prevent potential hazards. The region with a
stopbank
, which consists of three parts including the berm facing
to
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the river and the floodgate close to the inner land,
along with
 it, the
stopbank
 which is above the maximum flood
level
 within 100
year
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. It could deter river water from fluxing in,
however
, the rainwater from the other side of higher land will cause internal pounding.
On the other hand
, when there is no
stopbank
, buildings in
such
 areas are expected to directly encounter the influence of flooding. In both suggestions, the floor
level
 of those houses should be 300 mm above the flooding or pounding
level
.
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