ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
This
bar chart explains the expenditure on three departments in five different generations (under 30, 31-45, 46-60,61-75 and over 76) of citizens in the UK in 2004. Generally speaking
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Food and Drink has been gone up as they get old. In similarity to Entertainment
also
has been increased
at
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the
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most
of
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generations. Restaurants and
Hotel
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have fluctuated among them. Regarding Food and Drink, around 6%
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the under 30. it has grown and ended up approximately 23% at over 76.
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, Entertainment
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improved until 61-75 years old (23%) and dropped around 31% at the age of 76. Looking specifically at Restaurants and Hotel, it started with over 6% and
then
gradually made better to 12% in their 60s.
Although
at the age of 61-75 had dramatically declined popularity to only 3%, and fluctuated again up to 7% at over 76 years old.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • categories
  • age groups
  • residents
  • United Kingdom
  • steady increase
  • marked decrease
  • peak
  • age bracket
  • lower spending
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