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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The following chart illustrates the export earnings in various
categories
 in a particular country between 2015 and 2016. Meanwhile, the table depicts how the proportion of
exports
 changed in each
category
 in 2016 compared with 2015. During 2015 and 2016, there was a
slightly
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 increase in the value of different
categories
 of
exports
. At the same time, the proportion in each
category
 didn’t change significantly, With the largest percentage
was
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up to almost 15% and the lowest was about 0.8%
percent
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. Petroleum
products
 and Engineered goods still took the dominant position in both years but demonstrated a little difference in 2015.
With
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the
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petroleum
products
 was exceeds 5
billions
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 dollars than Engineered goods. Eventually, those two
categories
 of
exports
 changed to
the
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 similar level in 2016. Gems and jewellery showed a
decrease
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 trend which was abo slightly compared with 2015
in
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the year
of
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2016
while
 the Agricultural
products
 had an extra
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billions
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eamings
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earnings
 than the
last
 year in 2016. The most outlier figure was the
category
 of textiles as the earning increased
for
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 about
a
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half
than
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that
of
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in 2015. Concerning
for
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the changes in each
Category
 of
exports
 in 2016, as textiles value rose, the upward trajectory was the most outstanding compared with the other
categories
. The Second
categories
 in increasing trend were engineered goods, petroleum
products
 and agricultural
products
 within 10
percent
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 for about 8.5%, 3% and 0.81% relatively.
However
, the
Category
 of Agricultural
Products
 in
exports
 demonstrated a
conversely
 decrease
in
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 5.18% which was worth to be mentioned in 2016 compared with 2015.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, exports, category, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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