Many employees may work at home with modern technology. Some people claim that it benefits only the worker, but not the employers.

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Modern technology has created the opportunity for everyone to work from home. It is often argued that working remotely can

just

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only benefit workers

nor

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employers

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However

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as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far

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as I’m

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concerned, I personally feel that working remotely can be beneficial for

the

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employers

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by reducing the fund

that is

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required to set up

for

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apply

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company

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checking

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the employee’s performance

though

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the online portal.

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, employees gain the opportunity to work in a comfortable environment which is their own housing area, and

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has been proven that it has the potential to boost up the working performances and

their

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motivation because

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they are

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eager to finish their

task

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and to get rest earlier.

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this

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approach,

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this

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will benefit the

employers

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at the same time because every task will be submitted on time and

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checking by

superior

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in a

business

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online portal.

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, working remotely can allow both categories to mitigate the burden of expenses which led from

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transportation.

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, the petrol

gas

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and gas

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rate has increased drastically but working remotely indeed

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well with the situation of the fluctuation of

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cost.

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, it requires a tremendous amount in order to start a

business

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in a physical store. With the help of working remotely,

physical

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a physical

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company

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longer required and setting up an online

business

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portal is

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way cheaper compared to a physical store.

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, it is worth mentioning that every

business

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managed to sustain

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itself during

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the pandemic

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the invention of modern technology.

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, the concept of “work from home” is not going to be affected by any occasion in the future and

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will provide

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better insurance to

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company

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the company

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. In conclusion,

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the arguments and examples given, I strongly believe that working remotely not

just

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only

benefit

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benefits

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employees, but

employers

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receive pros as well. In the future, we will certainly see

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company will

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companies

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take a greater measure to shift their direction from the traditional to online for the well-being of the community.

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coherence cohesion

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph supports the main topic and that ideas are presented in a clear and well-supported manner. Use specific examples to illustrate arguments and ensure they are relevant to the topic.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – advantages
Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

The main advantage is...
The disadvantage of this...
The main benefit...
Despite these advantages...
One possible drawback...

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

351 words

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