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Some people today believe that the world’s increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The first opinion is
negative
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 effect cause of population growth. It means, reduced residences in every region, especially in countries where land is limited. Like the Netherlands or Singapore, they have limited land area so housing prices are very expensive.
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 that, some environmental experts see that the more the population, the more
environtmental
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environmental
 problems,
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 as plastic waste, and loss of water absorption. All of these problems have an impact on climate change.
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, positive
perception
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 about the increase in
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apply
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population happen in developing
country
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countries
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.
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, Indonesia predicted will reach a demographic bonus in 2030. With a large number of human resources, Indonesia is expected to reach its maximum economic potential. In fact, economic activity depends on
humans
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 activity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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