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The charts below show the percentage water used for different purposed in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage water used for different purposed in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following pie chart represents the percentage of
water
 used in North
America
, Africa, Central
Asia
, South
America
, Europe and South East
Asia
 for different
puposes
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purposes
such
 as industrial, agricultural and domestic
use
.
Overall
, the
amout
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amount
 of
water
 used in agriculture is more in most of these six areas compared to other types of
use
. The less quantity spent for domestic
use
 was in
Cental
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Central
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 and South East
Asia
, they only used 7% of
water
. Meanwhile, South
America
 utilized up
ot
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to
19%. The percentage of
water
spend
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 on industrial
use
 was high in North
America
 and Europe, which is 48% and 53%.
However
, Central
Asia
 spent only 6% on industrial
use
.
Water
 used for industrial purposes In
africa
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Africa
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 was only 7% and in South
America
 10%.
Agricultiral
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Agricultural
use
utilized
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is utilized
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up
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 to 88% in Central
Asia
 followed by Africa(84%), South East
Asia
(81%) and South
America
(71%).
However
, North
Amrica
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America
nad
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and
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 Europe used less
water
 compared to
then
 only 39% and 32%. We can see that
emand
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demand
 for agricultural and
industial
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industrial
use
 is bigger compared to domestic
use
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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