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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one untiversity in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The provided pair of pie graphs display the ratio of UK
students
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 at one particular college in England who were able to speak foreign languages other than English in the years 2000 and 2010.
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, it can be seen that
students
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 who speak Spanish only were the highest proportions in both years,
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 the percentage of German only was the least in the given period of time. In 2000 , 30% of
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 spoke only the Spanish language in
England's
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college
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then
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 after one decade, the proportion of
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 who spoke only the Spanish language increased by 5%.A small minority of the
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spoke another language in college in 2000
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 the proportion rose and stood at 20% in 2010. In 2000, almost 20% and 15% of
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spoke English and French.
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 percentage decreased by 10% and 5% and stood at an equal proportion of 10% in 2010. The percentage of
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students
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 who spoke two other languages was similar for both years at 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • globalisation
  • educational reforms
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • predominant
  • future career opportunities
  • employability
  • cultural reasons
  • economic reasons
  • political reasons
  • sustained popularity
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