The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years, and there are few places which are unaffected by it. However, tourism rarely benefits the countries that tourists visit. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
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industry has significantly grown in the past 60 years. Some people believe that the destination countries of
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usually do not benefit from
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. In
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examine the economic, cultural, and environmental effects
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tourism
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and explain why I disagree with the proposed notion. From a financial perspective when
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visit a
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they bring money with
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from their origin
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and spend it in the destination
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.
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, new money enters the financial cycle of that
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. Another source of income for countries is exporting goods and services.
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sometimes those products are too costly to be produced and their gross profit is less than the
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industry.
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, more
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more customers for local shops and restaurants.
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, the income of local residents will rise.
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,
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bring their own culture and experience with them. When locals interact with them they could exchange information and learn about other places and benefit from the experience, knowledge, and traditions of travellers to enrich their culture and potentially improve the quality of their life.
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, the travellers will share their experience with others when they return home and
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could help the hosting
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to demonstrate a more realistic picture of itself to the world.
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,
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has a positive effect on
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infrastructures of the hosting
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. When people choose a travel destination, they typically consider various factors
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as crime rate,
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of roads and buildings, and accessibility to emergency services in case of an accident.
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, to maximize profit from
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, the authorities would need to invest
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reducing the crimes, building proper buildings and
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as well as
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emergency services and healthcare. All these transformations will
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privilege the local people. In general, the majority of actions needed to be taken to attract and satisfy foreigners will
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improve the welfare of the residents.
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, the economic, cultural, and civic benefits of
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for a
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that hosts visitors were investigated.
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explained above, I do not agree with those who think
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will not benefit the visited
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