the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The given charts reveal the percentage of British
admission
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to an England university that can use languages other than English. these charts show a trivial difference between
students
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at the beginning and the end of a decade. To start with, the picture uncovers that in 2000, 20 per cent of
admission
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only can use English
while
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in 2020, the number of
students
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decreased to 10 per cent.
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, in 2000, the
admission
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who can only speak French is higher than
admission
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in 2010.
Instead
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, the number of
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admission
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that are able to speak only German is the same as the other
students
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in 2010.
On the contrary
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, the percentage of other items( namely: Spanish, another language, and two other language speakers) increased slightly. It is about 5 per cent. In general, these two charts represent the fluctuation in the percentage of
students
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who can use different languages. In two groups of
students
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, there is a reduction. In the other three groups, there is induction and the
last
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group stay fixed.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words admission, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • British students
  • university
  • speaking other languages
  • language proficiency
  • overall trends
  • comparison
  • 2000
  • 2010
  • chart
  • data
  • percentage
  • significant
  • increase
  • decrease
  • noteworthy
  • comparative analysis
  • improvement
  • decline
  • conclusion
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