Is the table and charts below due information on The police budget for 2017 and 2018 In one area of Britain. Table shows Other money came from and the tarts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons we are relevant.

Is the table and charts below due information on The police budget for 2017 and 2018 In one area of Britain. Table shows Other money came from and the tarts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons we are relevant.
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These pie charts and the table demonstrate the total police budget For 2017 and 2018, and the percentages of expenses during
this
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period In a certain part of Britain.
Overall
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, The total income was from three sources
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most part of the contribution came from the national government.
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the budget was distributed for three categories and a significant proportion was spent on salaries.
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the income from the national government has
been
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increased slightly from 175.5
million
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177.8
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to 177.8
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million
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during
this
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one year,
while
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the contribution from local taxes showed a significant rise
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about 10
million
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. Meanwhile, money from other sources remained stable and the total budget rose from 304.7 to 318.6
million
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.
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A
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3/4 of
proportion
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the proportion
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was spent on officers and staff salaries
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2017 it has
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dropped from 6% in 2018,
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the expenses for building and transport remained
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the same
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at 17%.
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, the part allocated for technology has
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escalated from 8% in 2017 to 14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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