Is the table and charts below due information on The police budget for 2017 and 2018 In one area of Britain. Table shows Other money came from and the tarts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons we are relevant.
These pie charts and the table demonstrate the total police budget For 2017 and 2018, and the percentages of expenses during
this
period In a certain part of Britain.
Overall
, The total income was from three sources While
most part of the contribution came from the national government. Thereafter
the budget was distributed for three categories and a significant proportion was spent on salaries.
Firstly
the income from the national government has been
increased slightly from 175.5 Unnecessary verb
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million
177.8
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to 177.8
million
during this
one year, while
the contribution from local taxes showed a significant rise in
about 10 Change preposition
of
million
. Meanwhile, money from other sources remained stable and the total budget rose from 304.7 to 318.6 million
.
Although
A
3/4 of Correct article usage
apply
proportion
was spent on officers and staff salaries Correct article usage
the proportion
on
2017 it has Change preposition
in
being
dropped from 6% in 2018, Unnecessary verb
apply
while
the expenses for building and transport remained same
at 17%. Correct article usage
the same
Moreover
, the part allocated for technology has been
escalated from 8% in 2017 to 14%.Unnecessary verb
apply
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