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There have been some problems with the public transport you use to commute daily. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: -describe the problems, -explain how these problems are affecting you and others, -suggest what could be done about it

#transport #manager #company #-describe #-explain #-suggest
Dear Sir\Madam, I am writing to
complaint
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 that public
transport
 that I use
everyday
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every
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 that
it
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apply
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has
been
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 several issues. First of all, it often breaks down in working and
it`s
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 conditions are not valid.
Therefore
, a lot of troubles are coming out in use.
In addition
, passengers are always crowded
due to
 the lack of traffic. These are causing many problems that in
use
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the use
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public
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of public
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transport
 these days. Because I work at school. I am not arriving
to
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at
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 school
due to
 these problems.
In addition
, many people suffer from these troubles that they get attached to the public
transport
 service. I have got many solutions for resolving these difficulties.
Firstly
, you should buy new
transport
. It can cause that wayfarers will not suffer anymore.
Secondly
, you should take care mechanical condition of your
transports
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. If you do not attend
that
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to that
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 difficulty, a lot of troubles will come out which is
a
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apply
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bigger
that
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than
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 now.
Therefore
, you should fix
a
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apply
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broken down-vehicles. I hope you will solve all of
problems
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the problems
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 and aware me. If you resolve issues, I will
so
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be so
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 glad.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Samandar Abdusattarov
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task response
Ensure to address all required points in the given task including clear description of problems, explanation of effects, and reasonable suggestions for resolution.
greeting and closing
Use more appropriate and formal greeting and closing in line with the formal nature of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the content by using clear paragraphing and linking words to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more suitable expressions in order to demonstrate a higher level of word choice.
grammatical range
Work on improving grammatical accuracy, sentence structure, and expression variety to achieve a higher score in grammatical range.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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