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Money offered for post graduate research is limited; as a consequence ,some people argue that financial support from the government should onlg be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects.Do you agree or disagree

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 availability of funds
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for
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 higher
education
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 it is often recommended that financial assistance should be offered to scientific research
instead
 of allocating funds to supplementary subjects.
This
 notion should be accepted as many facts in favour of practical
sibjects
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subjects
 could be considered.
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 the major argument in
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favour of subsidising science and technology is rooted in the fact that advancement in science and technology not only reflects the prosperity of the  nations but
also
 vouchsafes the other domains .To illustrate it can be said that investments in scientific research  including diagnostic and curative
measure
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measures
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 ensure the sound health of its people.
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 it
also
 paves
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 way towards the holistic development of a country by facilitating innovations and discoveries . Another compelling reason might  be
due to
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 salience of science in terms of boosting the economy and living standards of the country.
However
 one might argue that the
importancd
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importance
 of supplementary subjects
such
 as economics and statistics should not be neglected as it assists the nation in policy formation and analysing the
currend
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current
 situation.
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Therefore
 an equal proportion of
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financial
assistant
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 is required for these areas. From the analysis of the above discussion one can observe that evidently,
government
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the government
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 should pour more money
im
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in
 scientific research owing to its pivotal role in
comprehensive
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grow
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 of a state.
Nonetheless
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 it is pertinent that
others
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 domains should be taken into account
while
 distributing the funds .
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