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In school, girls tend to choose art subjects, boys tend to choose science subjects. What causes lead to this situation? Do you think this should be changed?

#school #girls #art #subjects #boys #science #situation
Some people do not
agree
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this
 idea since they think that
work
 experience
more
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 essential than their education,
consequently
 they say that university
do
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 not teach some important skills
their
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 students
that
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 is why recent graduates cannot find a job easily. They should learn something by trial and error,
hence
 if we want to find a great job, we will
work
 on our skills. In my view, most universities do not spend enough time
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teaching
to
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their students in the visual condition,
therefore
 I prefer to get
work
 experience than education. In conclusion,
generally
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 we separate two parts
people's
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mind
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,
hence
 the first part prefers education
than
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to increase
work
 skills. The second part thinks
different
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 a little bit,
thus
 they say that
grow
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 up your
work
 experience
more
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 important and I
also
 think if we want to find high salary
work
, we will
rise
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 our abilities.
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Stick to this essay structure:

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
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