In school, girls tend to choose art subjects, boys tend to choose science subjects. What causes lead to this situation? Do you think this should be changed?

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Some people do not
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idea since they think that
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essential than their education,
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they say that university
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not teach some important skills
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students
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is why recent graduates cannot find a job easily. They should learn something by trial and error,
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if we want to find a great job, we will
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on our skills. In my view, most universities do not spend enough time
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teaching
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their students in the visual condition,
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I prefer to get
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experience than education. In conclusion,
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we separate two parts
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the first part prefers education
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to increase
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skills. The second part thinks
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a little bit,
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they say that
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up your
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important and I
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think if we want to find high salary
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, we will
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our abilities.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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