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The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the primary reasons for from home and the rate of
men
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 and
women
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 working at home in the year 2019.
Overall
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, the Main reason for both gender was to save money. The least
men
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 worked because of childcare
while
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 the reason for
women
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 was to be more productive. Save money was the primary reason for
men
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 and
women
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 with 45% and 42% respectively.
Subsequently
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, to be more productive,
men
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 accounted for 24%
while
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women
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 represented just one-tenth. In 2019, For taking care of children, females are dominant and percentage more than 6 times more than males.
Women
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 made up 26%
whereas
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men
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 just 4%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • flexible schedule
  • family responsibilities
  • gender roles
  • professional duties
  • societal trends
  • economic responsibility
  • home-working hours
  • traditional roles
  • male-dominated industries
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