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. The diagram below shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

. The diagram below shows how a solar powered water pump works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The next process illustrates how to produce
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a amoung
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amoung
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amount
 of energy from
sun
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 for
water
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a water
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 pump for village needs.
Overall
 all facts, there are 3 main stages,
firstly
, gather DC product from
panel
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, especially photovoltaic cells, after,
bore
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the bore
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is liqued
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liqued
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liquid
 in
pump
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the pump
a pump
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,
then
, get in
conteuner
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container
.
Last
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 but not least, it provides to people .
To begin
 with, everything starts
in
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 solar panels,which accumulate new renewable energy. There are some special and unique cells, which assist to make it.
Secondly
,
in
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ground
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the ground
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 level,
water
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the water
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barrometr
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barometer
 shows that
level
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the level
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 has
raisen
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risen
. The reason why
because
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that
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bore
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the bore
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 tool makes
action
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an action
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, to increase pressure in pumps. On top of that, water starts to get to
tank
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the tank
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.
Finally
, it goes to
people
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
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