The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The amount of people achieving
further
education
in Britain, both female and male, over the span of three
differing
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periods with a gap of ten years in between, is displayed in
this
bar chart. Part-time
education
had increased for both sexes over the years from 1970/71 to 1990/91. In 1970/71, the number of females
half
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of that when compared to males.
This
discrepancy was most likely
due to
the stigma surrounding women studying in higher
education
.
However
, full-time
education
incrementally rose for women over
this
time range
while
it had decreased for men. The number of males declined to approximately 900 from 1000,
in contrast
to the
quantity
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of females that had enhanced from 780 to 1100 throughout 1970/71-1990/91.
Education
has become more prominent in the developing world in order to obtain secure careers.
This
is the reason
as to
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why higher learning is enhancing in the general population over the years.
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