You have been working for a company for some time, and other rival companies are willing to employ you with a higher salary for all the practical experience you have gained. Write a letter to your company manager and in your letter • Explain the situation • Say what you would like the manager to do (increase the salary etc.) • Say what action you would take in case the manager fails to meet your demands Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Mr Abdullayev, I am writing

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letter to you about some aspects related to the company and my work.

Last

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week, I was offered a high-paying job by

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the " Artel "

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company. I would like to tell you my thoughts on

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. As you know, I am the only one in the family who works and my son was accepted to Nyu York State University with

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80 % grant three

month

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ago.

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, we have to pay the 20 % contract. If we do not pay, my child will not

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to continue his studying, so gain my salary. "Artel" is offering me $ 300. 000 a year and your company has been giving me $ 90. 000 a year. I have to say that my salary does not cover my expenses. It is true that I had a lot of experience, nice and kind colleagues and a successful career at " SamAvto ", but for the reasons I

mentoined

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mentioned

above, I am leaving your office. If you do not raise my earning, I will be forced to continue working at " Artel". I hope you will accept my requirements. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Nodirbek Abduqahhorov.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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