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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods.Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging.Discuss both views and give ur opinion

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producers and supermarkets have the duty to decrease the amounts of
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goods
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.Others disagree that consumers should avoid buying products with a lot of packaging.
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will discuss both views and give relevant examples.
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 with,the main purpose of going into business is to make money.The maker and the convenience store try to make their product appealing so that customers can purchase it in order to generate income.
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 a sweet that’s well-covered will attract customers rather than the one that’s left open.
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goods
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 are been prevented from getting damaged when they are been packed in the right way.
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 that are well-packed
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 the tendency to sell faster than those that are not packed. Everyone loves to buy
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 appealing.
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customer
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 should ensure they
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 the
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date
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 before they purchase any products.For
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,a friend of mine bought milk
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 days ago and she didn’t
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 before she
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.She started having diarrhoea and when she called me I told her to
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 the
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 on the milk that was how we are able to discover the problem.She has to dispose
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 milk and get another one.
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went to the grocery store to buy spaghetti but she didn't
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 until when she got home.She has to go back there and change it. In conclusion,customers should learn and ensure they
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 the best before
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 of any commodity they want to buy before paying for it.
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