You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter •Explain what type of car you would like •Give details of when you would like the car •Request more information about the cost You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir/Madam, I would like to arrange a rental
car
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for my trip to Da Lat City next week. I will be arriving on May 15th
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I will stay there for 4 days. The visit will be more convenient if I have the vehicle to drive
within
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during
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that period. I would be grateful if you could drive the
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to Thanh Buoi bus station
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I will pick up the
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there. My arrival time is about 5:30-6:00 am. As I will be travelling with my two friends,
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luggage so we are looking for a small
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, 4 seats. We are going to plan to go
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to many
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places
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we need a
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in good condition. If you don’t mind, let us know about the costs and the confirmation before May 10th or as soon as possible so we can get
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arranged. Warm regards, Mai Huong

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grammar
Some long sentences make the read hard. Try shorter lines and a clear flow.
vocabulary
Use simple words and small phrases to keep to easy words.
content
Be clear about pickup and drop off, and who brings the car and where.
content
Ask for price in a direct way, for example 'Please confirm the price.'
tone
Polite tone and clear goal.
content
Gives date, place and car size.
style
Warm close at the end.
style
Good start with a polite opening.
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