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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following chart demonstrates the expenditure on three categories
food
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 and beverages, restaurants and hotels, and entertainment among five age groups of UK residents in 2004. The expenditure on food and drinks begins at slightly above 5% by
the
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those
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 under 30 and gradually increases by
the
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apply
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age, until reaching a peak of above 20% by the senile.

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