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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The table provides information about statistics of
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 adult generation who are attracted by four
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 of leisure: reading,
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animated play, playing and
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photography. It illustrates collected data in per cent between 1990 and 2010 years in cities and villages. First of all, we can observe that among adults the most popular activity is reading and it relates the whole considering period of time, but in 2010 in comparison with
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 there was small growth in both
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 which went up to 78 per cent and it is a maximum.
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photography and a percentage of it is equal to 7 in urban lands in 1990, which is a minimum.
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represented information, which concerns clue peculiarities is summarized and reported. Books are the most spread type of leisure.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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