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The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagrams below show the coastal village of Seaville in 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The maps indicate the changes that
were
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occurerd
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occurred
 in the village called Seaville over the 30-year period between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the maps is that
although
 there
were
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 the
hotel
at
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in
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 the
south-west
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southwest
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 and the bank
at
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in
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the south-east
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south-east
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southeast
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 throughout, plenty of facilities were introduced
instead
 of its
otiginal
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original
 green areas.
To begin
 with the map of 1980, the
villege
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village
 conserved its nature
such
 as woodland and marsh, both of which were located
at
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 the north. Looking
at
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just to their south, holiday cottages and
the
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hotel
 were provided for visitors. At the
coast line
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coastline
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, we can see that
while
 there was a tea room just next to the sand
douners
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dunes
,
east
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 bank was
opperated
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operated
 on the other side of the river. After the development, in 2010, it is remarkable that many recreation facilities appeared, whose example is a golf course built
instead
 of woodland.
Although
 the original
hotel
 was still on the
south west
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southwest
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 corner of the
villege
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village
, another
hotel
 was
instralled
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installed
 at the place where the sand dunes had been stood and holiday cottages
was
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 replaced
to
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next to the east bank which was unchanged. At the same time,
parmanent
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permanent
 houses
was
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 constructed
instead
 of
original
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 land of cottages
while
 retirement
villege
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village
 and
boad
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board
boat
broad
 club were designed in the middle of the
villege
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village
 where there had been nothing three decades ago.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, instead, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, villege with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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