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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart provide information about the number of
books
 borrowed from four
village
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villages
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 over a
four month
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four-month
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 period and the types of
book
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books
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 borrowed.
Overall
,
west
eaton
 and
church
 mount had a similar increase.
However
,
rye
 slip
,
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 showed a decline gradually during the period given and
Sutton
wood
 saw a large fluctuation. First of all, in June, the borrowing of
books
 in
Sutton
wood
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Wood
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 and
Rye
 slip began fairly high, at 300 and 250
books
 respectively,
West
Eaton
 and
church
 mound were the lowest with the same number.
In contrast
,
Sutton
wood
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Wood
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 plummeted to its lowest point in
august
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August
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 followed by
Rye
 slip,
whereas
west
eaton
 and
church
 mount rose together.
In
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 the end of the period given,
Sutton
wood
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Wood
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 jumped to 300
books
 which
was
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were
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same
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the same
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 as
Rye
slip
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Slip
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 in June but
Rye
slip
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Slip
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 showed no growth and end with 250
books
.
Moreover
,
west
eaton
 and
church
 mount had the same number of
books
 borrowed.
On the other hand
, the most of
books
 borrowed
was
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were
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a
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apply
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fiction
with
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at
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 43% and followed by biography at 19%.
Furthermore
, history and science were identical at 19% and the least popular was self-help at 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, west, eaton, church, rye, sutton, wood with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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