The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
given
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is given
provide
information from a 2008 report about the energy consumption by fuel in Add the particle
to provide
US
since 1980 with the prediction until 2030. Correct article usage
the US
Overall
, the US had depended on petrol and oil since 1980, Linking Words
while
nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower were identical Linking Words
of
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apply
uncommon
used energy.
To start with, coal showed an increase to around 22 Change the adjective
uncommonly
quadrillion
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units
by 2005 and Use synonyms
projected
to be the common energy consumption in 2030 with approximately 50 Add a missing verb
is projected
units
. Use synonyms
In addition
, natural gas and coal fluctuated between 20 and 15 Linking Words
quadrillion
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units
. Use synonyms
However
, the projection for them had Linking Words
a different
Correct the article-noun agreement
a different unit
different units
units
used which coal would be consumed about 30 Use synonyms
units
and natural gas would Use synonyms
be remained
since 2015 at roughly 25 Change to the active voice
remain
remained
quadrillion
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units
.
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On the other hand
, nuclear started at below 5 Linking Words
quadrillion
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units
and increased steadily over the years including with the projections. Use synonyms
Moreover
, both solar/wind and hydropower had been Linking Words
fluctuation
since 1980 and ended with the same Replace the word
fluctuating
units
in 2005. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, starting from 2010 both of the Linking Words
projection
had opposite Fix the agreement mistake
projections
units
which solar/wind predicted to Use synonyms
be risen
, Change to the active voice
rise
have risen
while
hydropower to be droppedLinking Words
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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