The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
given
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provide
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information from a 2008 report about the energy consumption by fuel in
US
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since 1980 with the prediction until 2030.
Overall
, the US had depended on petrol and oil since 1980,
while
nuclear, solar/wind, and hydropower were identical
of
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uncommon
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uncommonly
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used energy. To start with, coal showed an increase to around 22
quadrillion
units
by 2005 and
projected
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is projected
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to be the common energy consumption in 2030 with approximately 50
units
.
In addition
, natural gas and coal fluctuated between 20 and 15
quadrillion
units
.
However
, the projection for them had
a different
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a different unit
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units
used which coal would be consumed about 30
units
and natural gas would
be remained
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remain
remained
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since 2015 at roughly 25
quadrillion
units
.
On the other hand
, nuclear started at below 5
quadrillion
units
and increased steadily over the years including with the projections.
Moreover
, both solar/wind and hydropower had been
fluctuation
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since 1980 and ended with the same
units
in 2005.
Furthermore
, starting from 2010 both of the
projection
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projections
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had opposite
units
which solar/wind predicted to
be risen
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rise
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,
while
hydropower to be dropped
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  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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