The charts below show comparisons of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The charts below show comparisons of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
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The pie graphs compare the production of five types of natural resources in France, in 1995 and 2005 individually.
It is clear that
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Coal gained the highest proportion among the total
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29.80% in 1995 and 30.93% in 2005. Followed by Gas, which was slightly lower than Coal, accounting for 29.63% in 1995 and 30.31% in 2005.
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the usage of Petro seems like decreased in 2005. Even though it almost had the same rate as Gas and Coal in 1995,
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, when it comes to 2005, it only produced 19.55% of
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. Compared with the high productivity of Coal, nuclear and other energies didn’t present large figures. They both produced less than 10% of
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in 2005 individually and had a little more in 2005, with Nuclear of 10.10% and 9.10% of Other
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To sum up
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, it is clear in France, the
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production relied most on Coal, Gas, and Petro.
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nuclear and other
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was relatively low productivity.
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