The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in defferent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comarisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in defferent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the infromation by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comarisons where relevant.
The bar gives information about the proportion of Australian men and women in different
age
categories who did exercise in 2010. It is important to note that females did more exercise than males in all
age
groups
except 15 to 24. The 15 to 24 male
age
group
who did 52.8% work out was the highest rate in comparison with other
groups
and 35 to 44 which is just under 40% was the lowest proportion among male
groups
also
25 to 34,45 to 54 and 55 to 64 were well above 40%
in contrast
with 65 and over which was 46.7 higher than them. In Female
groups
45 to 54 which was 53.3% is higher than other Female
age
groups
moreover
, there were other
groups
with close rates which were 35 to 44 and 55 to 64 which respectively were 52.5 and 53.
Furthermore
, the 65 and over
age
group
of Females had the lowest rate of 47.1% compared with 25 to 34 which was 48.9.
Also
, the 15 to 24 Female
group
with 47.7% was lower than the 25 to 34 Female
age
group
.
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