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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart and table illustrate changing in incomes
of
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from
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 exporting various kinds of
goods
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such
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 as petroleum, engineered commodities, gems and
jewellery
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, agricultural
goods
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 and textiles between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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,
compare
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compared
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 to 2015, except
gems
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for gems
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 and
jewellery
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, other
value
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values
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 of exported
goods
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased respectively from 0.81% to 15.24%. Given
this
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 chart, the biggest value in two years was petroleum things, around between 60 to 70 billion dollars. The second earnings was engineered
goods
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, it
also
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 slightly
incresed
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increased
increases
 from 55 to over 60
billions
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billion
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.
Geams
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Gems
 and
jewellery
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 incomes went down a little bit
than
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more than
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 in 2015.
Also
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, gains from
agricultre
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agriculture
 were the same in two years
while
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 textiles
were risen
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rose
have risen
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. From the table,
values
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the values
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 of exports were changed in two years. The biggest change in values of exported products was showed in textiles, about increasing 15.24%
while
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 the smallest change was agricultural part,
resulted
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which resulted
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 in
0.81
Correct article usage
a 0.81
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%
increased
Wrong verb form
increase
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. Other exports
were
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apply
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increased, but gems and
jewellery
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were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decresed
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decreased
around
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by around
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 5.18%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, jewellery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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