The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.

The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.
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The bar charts
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the details
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percentage of two types of television programmes, namely
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and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia. It can be seen from the graph that, women
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an upward trend by taking in 70 % regarding
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reality
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shows. In comparison with
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shows, the proportion of males and females who watch game shows
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similar between with each other. In terms of
reality
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shows
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, the lowest percentage was people aged 16-24, at around 52% and the highest proportion was individuals between the ages of 45 and more, with approximately 68%. As regards
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game shows, inhabitants aged 25-34 watched less than any other age
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, the figure for games shows proves that was the most popular entertainment
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among people aged 45+ than other age groups . People aged 45+
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the most amateurs of these two shows.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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