Many young people move out of their homes to live alone or to live with their friends. Some people think this is a good idea. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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accepting
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foreign
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and they are staying alone
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you can discuss your problems with your family member
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your education and your life.
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tecknowlage or
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more time with
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