The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This

chart shows changes in the proportion of international students who graduated from a variety of universities across

Canada

. In 2001,

Canada

is not a popular destination for international students

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the highest proportion of international

graduates

is 7% in New Brunswick, followed by Nova Scotia at 6%,

while

in Ontario, there is only 3% of international

graduates

- the lowest cities across

Canada

. The shift of international students changed by 2006, as there are more international

graduates

in Canadian Universities. New Brunswick has the highest number of international

graduates

, an increase of 7% in 2001 to 12% in 2006.

However

, British Columbia has rapid growth among all cities, is the figure doubled by 2006. Over the five

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, the changes in the proportion of international

graduates

have been uneven across

Canada

However

, New Brunswick remained the most popular choice among all, with the highest percentage.

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