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The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gave information regarding post-school certificates in Australia
according to
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 different gender in 1999.
It is clear that
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 male
students
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 got skilled, postgraduate, and master's degrees more than female
students
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.
By contrast
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, the women in the school got undergraduate and bachelor diplomas higher than men of that. On the one hand, it is notable that nearly 90% of male
students
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 got professional certificates, far higher than the percentage of females at only 10%.
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, the number of male
students
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 who hold postgraduate diplomas was almost 70%, double for the female of that, with about 30%. At
last
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, the percentage of male
students
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 who got a master's degree was 60% more than that of female
students
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 at 40%.
On the other hand
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, undergraduate female
students
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 were 70%,
while
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 that of male
students
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 was around 40%.
Furthermore
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, Male and female
students
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 with bachelor's degrees differed slightly, about 48% and 52%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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