The pie charts below show the proportions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit.
The pie chart below
show
the proportion of Change the verb form
shows
visits
to Ireland
last
year by age
group and by gender and type of visit.
Overall
we can see that people in
Change preposition
aged
age
25-34 and 45-54 is
the same Correct subject-verb agreement
are
23
per cent and they Change preposition
at 23
most
Correct word choice
have more
visits
to Ireland
than other
Change the wording
another age group
other age groups
age
group.
The largest number of tourists to Ireland
are men who come on to
leisure Change preposition
for
visit
.
The first pie chart shows that three Fix the agreement mistake
visits
age
groups made up most of last
year's visitors
to Ireland
. These were 25 to 34 year-olds
(23%), 35 to Add a hyphen
34-year-olds
44 year-olds
(19%), and
45 to Add a hyphen
44-year-olds
54 year-olds
(23%). Four other Add a hyphen
54-year-olds
age
groups made up the rest, ranging from 6% to 11% of visitors
.
The second pie chart shows that Ireland
received last
year more male visitors
than female visitors
(56% to 44%). Business trips to Ireland
did not make up a very significant amount of trips, 17% in total; however
, the amount of business visits
conducted by males was much higher, 13%, compared to 4% female
business Change preposition
of female
visits
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