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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter • describe the problem at the hotel • explain what the manager had said at the time •say what you want the manager to do.

#night #hotel #noise #system #manager #contact #compensation #haven #time #•say
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing in order to complain about a faulty central heating system I
dissatisfied
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am dissatisfied
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 with the service because l recently
stay
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stayed
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 a night in a hotel and it was
problem
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a problem
the problem
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a
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faulty central heating system and l had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning. First of all, your manager
had
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did
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 not
said
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talk about
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this
 problem at the time.
Also
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Also,
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 l am afraid that your restaurant will be many problems in the future if you do not repair
central
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the central
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 heating system. I am disappointed because your manager
do
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did
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 not say your hotel problems. I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Aziza Ro'zimurodova.
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coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a clear structure and coherence. Make sure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas are logically connected.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are not appropriate for a formal letter. Ensure that you use appropriate salutations and closings in formal letters.
task achievement
The response addresses the main points of the task, but lacks clarity and detail. Be more specific in describing the problem at the hotel and the manager's response, and clearly state what you want the manager to do.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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