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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The food consumption could vary from country to another and that could be as a part of so many reasons like some of these countries could has a population, the food tyoes that they are used to eat, if we took four countires in example Campodia, Poland, Egypt and Mexico we will find out that the highest consumption in
rice
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 would be in Campodia, in the other hand people dont seem likely to
use
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 much of
wheat
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 and it has the lowest rate as
calories
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 per person and they
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use
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 one hundered and three of
Maize
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, If we took a look on another country
such
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 as egypt we will find out that the people in it consume more
calories
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 of
wheat
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 per person per
day
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 which is about 1095 and
also
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 they
use
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 501 of
rice
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 and 578 of
Maize
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 which is quite the highest between the two other countries
such
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 as Campodia and Poland, since we mentiond Poland the
rates
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 of consume for the person per
day
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 it has minimum
rates
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 the
Rice
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rates
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 would be 19 and they dont
use
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 the
Maize
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 at all and actually their consumption is centered on
Wheat
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 by 865
calories
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 per
day
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, that leaves us with Mexico that
use
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 57 of
rice
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 and 275 of
wheat
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 and the has the highest
rates
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 on
Maize
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 by 1083
calories
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 per
day
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, use, wheat, calories, maize, day, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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