The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
shows a Bar graph the how people
spend their time at different ages
. It is clear from the graph that they have three categories also
, five different ages
in the UK in 2004.
According to
what is shown, those under the age of 30 spend more in a restaurant and hotels
approximately 14% than in food
and drink
, and entertainment
about 5%. For people
31-45 ages
the food
and drink
,restaurant and hotel about more than 10% while
entertainment
is less than 10%. People
in 46-60 age they spending food
and drink
more than 15% on
but restaurants and Change preposition
apply
hotels
, and entertainment
are less than 15%. People
61-75 ages
they spending food
and drink
, and entertainment
more than 20% while
restaurants and hotels
are less than 5%. Eventually, people
76 ages
and more they spending in food
and drink
more than 20% while
entertainment
less than 15% at least restaurant and hotel less than 5%.
To sum up
, we could say that for all ages
the favourite spending a food
and drink
then
entertainment
then
restaurants and hotels
in the UK in 2004.Submitted by fttoo99 on
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