The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The graphs illustrate a percentage of
computer
accessibility, where the first
graph
shows the general population’s trend between 2002 and 2010, and the second
graph
shows the relationship
of
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computer
possession and education divided by various levels from the years 2002 and 2010. In the first
graph
, in 2002,
computer
usage was at 55%, which rose gradually to about 5% every 2 years and reached 75% in 2010. In total, the percentage of
computer
usage grew significantly by about 20% in an 8-year period. The second
graph
presents the same direction of the growth of
computer
accessibility in the educational market, in which the proportions of those who hold higher graduation qualifications were notably higher than those with lower education levels in both years.
For example
, in 2002, the
rate
of no
highschool
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high school
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diploma was around 15%,
while
the
rate
of postgraduate qualification was around 75%. In comparison, in 2010, the
rate
of no
highschool
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high school
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diploma escalated to about 45%,
while
the
rate
of postgraduate qualification almost reached the peak
to
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about 95%.
Overall
, the proportions of those below the bachelor’s
degree
level increased by approximately 30%,
while
the figure for bachelor’s
degree
and master’s
degree
holders rose by around 20%, which is 10% less. In conclusion,
computer
ownership generally increased
for
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about 20% between 2002 and 2010.
Moreover
, in 2002 and 2010, no
highschool
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high school
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diploma, high school
graduate
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graduates
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and college students gained significantly greater access, by up to 30%,
while
bachelor’s
degree
and postgraduate qualification holders expanded the usage of computers at the same level
of
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the general trend by 20%.
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