The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
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The graphs illustrate a percentage of
computer
accessibility, where the first Use synonyms
graph
shows the general population’s trend between 2002 and 2010, and the second Use synonyms
graph
shows the relationship Use synonyms
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between
computer
possession and education divided by various levels from the years 2002 and 2010.
In the first Use synonyms
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, in 2002, Use synonyms
computer
usage was at 55%, which rose gradually to about 5% every 2 years and reached 75% in 2010. In total, the percentage of Use synonyms
computer
usage grew significantly by about 20% in an 8-year period.
The second Use synonyms
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presents the same direction of the growth of Use synonyms
computer
accessibility in the educational market, in which the proportions of those who hold higher graduation qualifications were notably higher than those with lower education levels in both years. Use synonyms
For example
, in 2002, the Linking Words
rate
of no Use synonyms
highschool
diploma was around 15%, Correct your spelling
high school
while
the Linking Words
rate
of postgraduate qualification was around 75%. In comparison, in 2010, the Use synonyms
rate
of no Use synonyms
highschool
diploma escalated to about 45%, Correct your spelling
high school
while
the Linking Words
rate
of postgraduate qualification almost reached the peak Use synonyms
to
about 95%. Change preposition
of
Overall
, the proportions of those below the bachelor’s Linking Words
degree
level increased by approximately 30%, Use synonyms
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the figure for bachelor’s Linking Words
degree
and master’s Use synonyms
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holders rose by around 20%, which is 10% less.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
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ownership generally increased Use synonyms
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about 20% between 2002 and 2010. Change preposition
by
Moreover
, in 2002 and 2010, no Linking Words
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diploma, high school Correct your spelling
high school
graduate
and college students gained significantly greater access, by up to 30%, Fix the agreement mistake
graduates
while
bachelor’s Linking Words
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and postgraduate qualification holders expanded the usage of computers at the same level Use synonyms
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the general trend by 20%.Change preposition
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