Some people feel that certain workers like nurses, doctors and teachers are undervalued and should be paid more, especially when other people like film actors or company bosses are paid huge sums of money that are out of proportion to the importance of the work that they do. How far do you agree?

People are encouraged to work.
However
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some spend whole their lives on low
wadges
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wages
wedges
such
as doctors and nurses
while
others worked under high income. I completely agree with the above statement I will discuss my agreement with reasonable examples.
To begin
with, in
this
day and age, professionals
such
as teachers
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been earning a low income in which they sufficiently fulfil their family needs and
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to have
have
received respect and dignity from society.
As a result
, fewer and fewer people prefer
this
field. They don't have extra bounces on special events
such
as Eid and Diwali.
On the other hand
,popular people
such
as film stars or sports athletes are working under wealth. Even if they work without any pressure and charge heavily for their actions
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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