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The consumption of coffee and tea buying between five Australians' cities. Summarise and report the information.

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this
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 essay, will compare the different consumption of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 buying between five
Australians’
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 cities. Many individuals used to have their morning
coffee
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 or
tea
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 as take away from their favourite
coffee
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 shop, So we will take five Australian cities as
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 to compare
between
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the percentage of people living there and buying fresh
coffee
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, buying
instant
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coffee
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 and going to a
cafe
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 for a
coffee
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 or
tea
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. People in Sydney
prefers
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prefer
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 to go to the
cafe
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 for having
coffee
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 or
tea
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. As we can see that, more than 60% of the city
residents
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 went
for
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cafe
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 for a
coffee
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tea
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or tea
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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.
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, nearly 45% of them bought
instant
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coffee
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while
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 less than 45% of the
residents
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 bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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. Comparing
Melborune
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Melbourne
 and Brisbane we find that both
residents
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prefers
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 to go to
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cafe
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a cafe
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 for
coffee
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 and
tea
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 and usually buy
instant
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coffee
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 more than
instant
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coffee
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.
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, we can find that only 50% of Adelaide
residents
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 bought
instant
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coffee
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 over the
last
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 4
weeks
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while
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 less than 35% of them bought fresh
coffee
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. Horbart’s
residents
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 are more likely
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 other Australians’
residents
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 in the five cities they
bough
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bought
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instant
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coffee
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 more than fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 and went to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffee
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tea
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 more with
high
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a high
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 significant percentage.

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