the pie charts below shop the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

the pie charts below shop the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The two pie charts show information on Internet shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. A period of 10 years.
Overall
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, it can seem that the stores were a sale in four things called, travelling, film and music,
books
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and
clothes
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. In 2003, the highest proportion of sales was travelling and in 2013 the highest percentage was entertainment.
In contrast
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, the lowest was
books
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in 2003 and
clothes
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were lowest in 2013 respectively. To start with, in the year 2003 presented that there was 36 per
cent
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for travelling and it is very higher than the others. Followed by
clothes
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at 24 per
cent
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and entertainment likes movies and films at 21 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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,
books
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were very low the percentage was 19 per
cent
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. In 2013, all things increased from 2013 ,but, travelling declined from 36 per
cent
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to 29 per
cent
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. And the entertainment was higher than other things at 33 per
cent
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. Followed by travelling,
books
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and
clothes
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respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, clothes, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail sectors
  • online shopping sales
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • significant growth/decline
  • electronic goods
  • clothing and footwear
  • food and beverages
  • household goods
  • recreational goods
  • stable sales
  • emerging sectors
  • overall growth
  • decade comparison
  • shift in consumer behavior
  • e-commerce
  • trend analysis
  • market dynamics
  • purchasing habits
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