The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
These two charts indicate the difference between
adultsin 1958 from 2008
,and show the percentage of
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adultsspent on different activities.
First,two of the main parts in both charts are working and sleeping in overview, and the most difference between the two charts is the times of relaxing and going out with friends and family.
Second,people in 2008 spent 9% more of their
timeworking than in 1958;
however, they slept 7% less than in 1958. It indicates that people in 2008 might be more tired than in 1958.
due toa lack of sleep,
adultsin 2008 spent 5% more of their
timerelaxing at home.
timeof going out with friends or family dramatically declined by about 13% in 2008.
In addition, the
timeof travel to work increase
4%. It indicates that
adultsin 2008 might live far from the place where they worked.
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