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The diagram illustrates the process of recycling waste glass bottles. It is clear that there are three distinct stages in the recycling process, beginning with the collection of unused bottles and ending with the delivery of new bottles.

The diagram illustrates the process of recycling waste glass bottles. It is clear that there are three distinct stages in the recycling process, beginning with the collection of unused bottles and ending with the delivery of new bottles.
#process #waste #glass #bottles #three #stages #collection #delivery
In the following
stage
 fermented
product
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products
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 in separated
to
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into
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 2
phrases
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phases
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: liquid and solid products.
Then
liquid
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the liquid
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product
 is purified. After liquating ethanol is
purifying
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 for 5 hours. Over the course of
8th
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the 8th
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stage
 purified ethanol is stored. The final step involves carrying the ready products to special tracks and transporting them to customers The pictorial diagram illustrates how wasted
glass
bottles
 are recycled
an
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.
Overall
, there are 3 huge stages and 11 distinct procedures in the linear process, commencing with collecting wasted
glass
bottles
 and culminating with
sales ready
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 products for
to
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customers. The initial phrases of
this
 pictorial diagram all happen with collecting wasted
glass
bottles
.
At the first
stage
 in the
process
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 these
bottles
 are brought
into
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to
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collection
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the collection
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 point. After transporting it in order to recycle again, the second main
stage
 is started with washing
bottles
 with
high pressure
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 water. In the next
step
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 all
bottles
 are separated
brown
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into brown
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, green and clean ones. Afterwards, they are delivered
into
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to
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glass
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a glass
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 factory. After the stages of
delivering
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, pieces
glass
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of glass
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 are placed into
furnace
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the furnace
a furnace
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 with a funnel-like opening
which
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in which
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 the temperature soared up to 600-800 degrees Celsius. Before
product
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a product
the product
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 is shaped in
glass
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a glass
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mold
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, they are separated into recycled and new liquid
glass
. The following
stage
 is ready
product
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products
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 are transported into supermarkets in order to sail consumers.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage, product, glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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