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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for other what might have caused this situation? How improve it ?

#people #behaviour #lack #respect #situation
Many
persons
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 have confidence
in
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that today is a widespread rise in anti-social conduct and
absence
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an absence
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 of admiration for
other
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others
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. What might have the best solution for
this
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these
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 circumstances? How to
increas
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increase
 respect and attention to humans? Today Modern technologies are increasing
day
 by
day
 they are extremely handy for individuals to use. That's why everybody is attached through telephone lines and the
internet
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Internet
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.
This
 condition
reducing
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people's respect and attention to their loved ones. Because they put
to
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secondary
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apply
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this
 relationships. Most mortals have more
that
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than
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 plenty
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of properity
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properity
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property
prosperity
, relaxation and independence.
However
 their
ticher
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teacher
 want ever
mone
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more
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. To gratify their hearts avarice humans have become workaholics
as
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and as
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 a result have no time for
retatives
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relatives
 and
compaions
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companions
 persons have become egotistic remote and
unconcer ned
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unconcerned
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. To add to it children spend more time
to
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on
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 social media and so they don't
honor
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honour
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 them. The changing family construction is another large source of
this
 occurrence. Earlier individuals
live
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 together
their
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with their
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 families and grandparent for their
childes
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children
 upbringing. Now, more parents go out to work and their children exposure. At that time more juniors watch and see the programs fin of brutality and lawbreaking.
As a result
, their horizon is changed.
That is
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their
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pressure and anti-social behaviour increase
and
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as
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 lack of respect for others. There are many resolutions to
this
 issue
to begin
 with adults start to learn
relationships
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about relationships
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 between work and family life.
Administration
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 should
also
 repair the maximum hours
a
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an
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 employee per week to that exploitation is not there in the
work shop
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workshop
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. There are a lot of benefits and media can play a big role in our life. With
this
 humans can take in good communal Peace.
To sum up
,
this
 issue
are
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is
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 increasing
day
 by
day
. But
of
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its solutions has adverse effects on
community
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the community
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.
This
 trouble can solve
out
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with the help of individuals and
government
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the government
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 for
the
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a
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 suitable future.
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