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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The line chart illustrates the data of
books
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 from June to September 2014 that were lent in four different village libraries,
as well as
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 the pie graph presents the proportion of
books
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 which were lent during
this
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 time
according to
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 classification.
Overall
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, it is apparent that most people borrow these
books
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 at distinct times in four villages and fiction is the kind of book most favoured over
this
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 time.
To begin
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 with, the figure for the Rye slip was a dramatically downward trend its start point was 300
patterns
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 in June, but
then
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 slowly fell to half
patterns
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 compared to the first month.
On the other hand
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, the rest of other libraries have these
patterns
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 which are borrowed much more in the
last
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 month, when both West Eaton and Church Mount were the same data in June and September respectively 50
books
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 and 150
books
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.
Additionally
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, the number of Sutton Wood saw its highest point (300
books
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)
last
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 time,
however
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, it strongly decreased in August (100
patterns
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) To turn to the pie chart, fiction is the most preferred when it has lent more than 40%.
Moreover
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, there were similar percentages of science and history which accounted for 10%, the type of self-help and biography respectively 10% and 19%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, patterns with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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