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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The female unemployment in each country of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in 2013 and 2014
shown
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is shown
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 in the graph below.
This
indicators
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indicator
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 provides
the
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apply
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information about the total percentage of unemployment
that
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which
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 was 5.97 in 2013 and fell
steadly
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steadily
steady
 to 5.7 in 2014.
By contrast
 only in Scotland
the
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do the
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indicators
 move to
opposite
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the opposite
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.
The
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apply
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England
that
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which
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 is one of the
populated
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most populated
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country
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countries
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 could handle the increase and
reduse
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reduce
own
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its own
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indicators
 from 6.8 to 6.5. But the biggest decrease was in Northern Ireland,
cuze
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use
 the
the
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apply
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indicators
 have fallen to whole 1%, from 5.6 to 4.6.
The
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apply
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Wales's unemployment
rates
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rate
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 fell
steadly
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steadily
 from 5.4 to 5.0
its
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apply
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more than
indicators
 of
Sconland
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Scotland
 which increase to 0.64% just in a year.It
demonstrate
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demonstrates
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 that women in Scotland have less importance than in
other country
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another country
other countries
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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