The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the levels of employment in different sectors of the UK economy from 1910 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The given pie charts represent the number and employment rate of
men
and
women
on different job schedules in the UK market between 1988 and 2012.
Overall
,
men
worked mostly
on
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in
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full-time occupations,
although
women
placed
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part-time
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in part-time
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positions in the economy of
UK
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.
Moreover
,
men
who were working on a job
much
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were much
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more
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higher than
the
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women
counterpart. In 1988, just above
the
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half of
men
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the men
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population worked as full-time
professions
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(%53) which
were
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accounted for 12,539 males.
This
ratio decreased slightly to %47, but the number of full-time male workers increased to 13,794.
On the other hand
, the ratio of part-time male employees only took 6 per cent in 1988 which
was
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only increased by 1%, eventually, reached roughly two
thousands
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individuals 24 years later.
In contrast
, from 1988 to 2012, the number of part-time
women
employees rose by approximately three
thousands
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which
were
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was
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equal to roughly one-fourth of the female community.
In addition
, 22% of
women
worked as part-time employees before
this
declined by 2%, but increased by around 700 female workers in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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