The bar cart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different groups who did regular phisical activity in 2010.

The graph compares the proportions of Australian
men
's and
women
's
age
groups who participated in physical activity on a regular basis in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
in 2010
women
over 25 were more interested in doing physical activities than
men
and in the
age
group between 15 to 24, the proportion of
men
who exercised regularly was more than that of
women
. The bar chart depicts the percentage of Australian males aged 15 to 24 who engaged in regular activity, which stood at 52.8%.
While
, as the
age
profile increased to 40, their interest in physical activities decreased.
In addition
, the lowest percentage of active
men
was related to the 35 to 40
age
group (39.5%).
Also
, as
men
aged
after
this
period, the percentage of those who participated in activities increased moderately from 39.5% to 46.7%.
On the other hand
, Australian females had a participation rate in sports training between approximately 47% and 53% in 2010. In their middle
age
, the proportion of active
women
was at the highest level, around 53.3%.
Whereas
,
women
in both younger and older ages had a lower proportion, around 47.7% and 47.1%, respectively.
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