Sugar consumption is too harmful. Some say it is government’s responsibility to limit sugar intake, while others say it’s individual who are responsible. Discuss both views and give you opinion?

We would
introducei
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introduce
the business and provide the Ball Revive service during the local and national tennis events and tournaments,
whereas
most of the participants are our potential customers and there would be a window of opportunity to gain their interest in our business. I know from personal experience that sales can be highly challenging for our business. I have created new ideas and services in my previous careers.
Also
, I have developed several great and innovative ideas, but
in addition
to creating them, I have the ability and relevant expertise to convert these ideas into sales. The Ball Revive service is an
amazinge
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amazing
idea that has made the tennis community interested. After gaining these potential customers' interest, they might look at our website to learn about our different solutions, read testimonials and search for promotional sales or other special offers that we usually would be considered for new customers.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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