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Nowadays, some workplaces tend to employ equal numbers of men and women workers. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Today, majority of the male and female workers are working together in the same places around the world. In my mind, it is
beneficial
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a beneficial
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 way to
work
 in the same place for
men
 and
women
. In
this
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numbers
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number
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 of
men
 and
women
 than negative ones. Presently, numerous people apply for jobs in order to
work
.
Therefore
 employers want to employ
men
 or
women
 employees so as to be suitable for a job. They
work
 together in order to improve
work
condition
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conditions
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.
For example
, we meet male and female teachers at
school
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schools
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, companies, Universities and other organizations. Every employee does his or her own task to do the best in their field.
As a result
, it is useful for all
of
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people. Another reason is that if only
women
work
 at school it is not effective for pupils because of being places for
men
 teachers.
However
 other employers want to give jobs
for
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only
males
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to males
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 because they think that it is
a
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 correct choice for them.
In addition
, males always come to
work
 on time.
Furthermore
, they never make up for being late because of having their own decisions.
However
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 females
also
work
 better than males
although
 they have young children.
Moreover
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 they do the best for their jobs and families. In conclusion, it is
more
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a more
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 positive way for
women
 and
men
 to
work
 together. In my opinion, every person has his own task. I have tried to relevant answers to the question from my experience.
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