The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
map chart depicts how can collect
rainwater
and
also
, be used
rainwater
in our daily day. It's clear from the graph that people in Australia use
this
way to collect
rainwater
and I will show the steps of collecting the
rainwater
.
According to
what is shown,when rain falls down on every house they have a drain it's collected the drops of rain
then
goes to a pipe to the
water
filter inside the pipes flow to storage where all rain drops come here
then
go to
water
treatment they use chemicals to formal the
water
to be ready for drinking eventually the
rainwater
go-to drinking
water
.
To sum up
, we could say that, it's an interesting way to collect raindrops
also
, the treated
water
is manifested to be the
water
ready for drinking in the end
this
way it is more common in
a Australian villages
Correct the article-noun agreement
an Australian village
Australian villages
show examples
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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