The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
map chart depicts how can collect rainwater
and also
, be used rainwater
in our daily day. It's clear from the graph that people in Australia use this
way to collect rainwater
and I will show the steps of collecting the rainwater
.
According to
what is shown,when rain falls down on every house they have a drain it's collected the drops of rain then
goes to a pipe to the water
filter inside the pipes flow to storage where all rain drops come here then
go to water
treatment they use chemicals to formal the water
to be ready for drinking eventually the rainwater
go-to drinking water
.
To sum up
, we could say that, it's an interesting way to collect raindrops also
, the treated water
is manifested to be the water
ready for drinking in the end this
way it is more common in a Australian villages
.Correct the article-noun agreement
an Australian village
Australian villages
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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