The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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This

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map chart depicts how can collect

rainwater

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and

also

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, be used

rainwater

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in our daily day. It's clear from the graph that people in Australia use

this

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way to collect

rainwater

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and I will show the steps of collecting the

rainwater

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According to

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what is shown,when rain falls down on every house they have a drain it's collected the drops of rain

then

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goes to a pipe to the

water

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filter inside the pipes flow to storage where all rain drops come here

then

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go to

water

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treatment they use chemicals to formal the

water

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to be ready for drinking eventually the

rainwater

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go-to drinking

water

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To sum up

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, we could say that, it's an interesting way to collect raindrops

also

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, the treated

water

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is manifested to be the

water

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ready for drinking in the end

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way it is more common in

a Australian villages

Correct the article-noun agreement

an Australian village

Australian villages

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainwater, water with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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