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Governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move from large cities to regional areas. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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With the increasing
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 of
population
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 into the
city
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center
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, the balance between accommodation and
businesses
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 area has been broken,
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 triggering the encouragement of
industries
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 and
businesses
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 to move from
cities
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 to regional
areas
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. In my opinion, the advantages of
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 trend overweight the disadvantages. On one hand, reducing the pollution released by industrial companies can help to create a healthier community. Pollution from the
industries
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 always has negative influences on
the
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urban health, bringing poor indoor air quality and heavy
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 noises. With the movements to regional
areas
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, these effects will be minimized to an acceptable level, which can help citizens leaving in a cleaner and healthier
city
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. So as some business companies, if the
city
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center
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 accepts both companies and amusements, the urban health will
trun
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turn
run
 into
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trouble.
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, movements of
industries
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 and
businesses
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 from large
cities
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 and regional
areas
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 can offer the rare area more career opportunities, and
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 balance the population ratio. More and more people from rare
areas
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 are trying to seek a career opportunity in large
cities
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 in order to feed their families,
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, neither the transportation nor the accommodations are sufficient for the citizens.
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, terrible situations can be easily solved by offering jobs in regional
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.
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 offering jobs, the trend of centralization can
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 be slowed down, crowd
cities
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 can be relieved. I have to admit that
businesses
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 and
industries
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 can make people more
convinent
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convenient
,
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 as parcel delivery,
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, with the development of technologies, requirements from citizens can be satisfied more and more quickly.
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, the reduction of pollution and the offered work opportunities can help the development of both large
cities
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 and remote
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.
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, the movements should be considered as a positive
encouragment
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encouragement
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • decentralization
  • sustainable development
  • infrastructure
  • quality of life
  • economic disparity
  • rural revitalization
  • overcrowding
  • resource allocation
  • talent retention
  • commuter issues
  • regional development
  • corporate relocation
  • workforce migration
  • urban-rural divide
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